I write non-erotica, I do need to say I am very impressed with the collective creativity here in comparision to other amatuer writing sites. The authors on the non eroctia sites seemed to sacrifice all art in order to be word perfect. Albeit their commas are perfectly placed their shit is so safe it makes my eyes bleed.
One reason past tense is seen more often, is that writing in the present tense provides serious challenges to the author: maintaining perspective, introducing prior events, and filtering the stream of consciousness. In a longer body of work it becomes a chore. I need to pay attention and see how present tense porn reads....brb
Gallagher, Morgan is the sha-dizzle, since studying the material she has posted I have got exponentially better, sadly if we are to write about what we know I really will not be able to create the subject matter for this site. Nonetheless, her help has been huge…wish me luck as soon as I get some sex I write about !
I wanted to stop by and thank Morgan, since studying the material she has posted I have got exponentially better, sadly if we are to write about what we know I really will not be able to create the subject matter for this site. Nonetheless, the help has been huge…thanks so much !
Kinda like working out at the gym , gender bending as a writer is great exercise if nothing else
Title of Story: Yuletide Mindfuck
Genre: Oral Sex
Author: Jaymal
Why you're recommending ; In this masterful story the characters ring true with depth and angst . Elaborate use of a brillant backstory transcends smut and reads like stellar fiction
My tumble from grace preceeded my splat ,be that as it may, in college I was hot , I was do-able ,daytime do-able
Don't Laugh but in college I was once considered handsome
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My fall from grace was preceeded my splat ,be that as it may, in college I was hot , I was do-able ,daytime do-able
Katrina busy unfurling her guitar cord tangled at her left foot , Melvin baritones "picture you upon knees' ,Katrina liberated from the snake pit of chords , replies to his sing song in a speaking voice 'What the fuck ? Romeo owns only one chair ? 'Melvin continuing 'Tea for Two' Katrina rolling her eyes like an annoyed waitress,deadpans 'Go figure ,dude has only one chair but enough tea for two" suppressing a giggle , Melvin belts out the next bar, 'No one near to see or here, ''Who the fuck would wanna eavesdrop on people drinking tea ,,,that's way too kinky for even Tommy O. Katrina strikes, nodding toward talented but tragic guitarist Tom O'Malley a wisp of a man , his forearms adorned with ornate grammatically incorrect matching tattoos the left reading to fast to live ,the right reading to young to die . 'We won't let it be known we only a telephone' , Melvin croons ,'this mudder phucker must be from Da Parish, too cheap 2 get a second chair , but got a Blackberry yet ain't givin' out the number ...that do even make a bit of sense " Katrina scoffs, Melvin,shaking his head full of Hendrix hair , 'Dawn will break .. you'll bake a cake '. She waves her arms like an over caffinated traffic cop marches toward him , " Hold up ! .hold up ! ,you freaking communisss you gots the wrong girl iffin' ya think Katrina Marie Trahan is baking a friggin' cake before she runs a brush cross her teeth"
11 TH GRADE .....58 on READABILTY
Having a beta reader willing to tell me what I need to hear instead of what I want to hear looms large
Touche .....Altering 'A ceiling fan slashes ineffectually at the syrupy air '....to read "A ceiling fan slashes at the syrupy air but barely creates a whisper of draft" is a prime example of showing rather than my juvenile telling .
Winning this award is akin to being the tallest midget in the circus ,I therefore denounce this craft and concentrate my efforts on...............
.Maybe a matter of semantics ,I agree all writers tell stories. However in so far as milieu, verbose uninspired "telling" translates rarely into good fiction
If I read 'A ceiling fan slashes ineffectually at the syrupy air ' I am seduced into reading on
When I read 'as you all know summer is not only hot but it is humid' I am not inspired to read more
The ability to 'show' not 'tell' is indubitably the dividing line between writing and good writing ....Regardless of genre an author's ability to 'show ' is the seductive force that compels reader to continue
The ability to 'show' not 'tell' is indubitably the dividing line between writing and good writing ....Regardless of genre an author's ability to 'show ' is the seductive force that compels reader to continue
Ann Patchett's "Bel Canto "
I am not sure I ever read a book I did not learn something from ,even the dreck can teach us something ...ya dig ?
What never left me was the Dick and Jane books that infected me as a with a need to read
The above wrote : "If you can make me laugh or even crack a smile we're set for life "
Great minds think alike
