We burned slowly, hearts untamed,
Aching words we never named.
Fingers traced on glass alone,
Feelings unshaken, the flesh unknown.
Desires written but never freed,
Bound by longing, soul-deep need.
Our minds ignited, yet restrained,
Fingers so close, yet passion remained.
Don't deny it, between us is a fire,
Let it burn, let the temperature go higher.
My body would harden, your body purred,
Our deep desires shared in written word.
Fingers twitching, aching for skin,
Actions imagined, not quite a sin.
When you left, the flame had stayed,
You now return because for that I prayed.
Nice to get (and take) a second chance. I hope it works out this time.
I wish I could I say it did. Second time was much more intense, so incredibly deep and lasted longer... but the pain of longing and separation once again bit her did so with much more severity. The last, and I believe final, separation was mutual.
If you read 'Fading Echo' you will get a sense of what it felt like...
Thanks for your comments.👌
Not a great fan of poetry, but this conveys the thoughts very well. Good luck in the competition!
Wow! I'll take that as a big thumbs up!
Very nice poem. Great writing and best of luck in the competition
Thanks for your kind words, Anna
What a beautiful piece of writing. I love it. You’re so talented ❤️
One finds their best with the right company!!
Even a poetry Luddite like me recognises this is excellent. 😊
Good luck in the competition!
Hahahah!!! I had to look up how the term Luddite applies to poetry!!!
But thank you for your wonderful feedback. It really really makes the effort worthwhile... for a family man with 4 kids who has to sneak his Lush habits to work where he has a high pressure job... it is not easy!
Great depiction of a passion with barriers. A hard thing to deal with, for sure. I, too, really liked the line about imagined actions not quite a sin. Best wishes in this competition! 😊
Thanks sooooo much... you don't know how much i enjoy receiving feedback like this.
A wonderfully written poem, with passions and desires vividly expressed, yet unconsummated due to mental barriers and physical separation. Love the picture you chose to illustrate your competition entry. Good luck.
Thank you sooo much. Really!
Nicely done. Cool images and I liked your rhymes. Ah yes, long distance love can be a joy and a trial. Nice poem. Well done.
Indeed... my experience validates this
'Actions imagined, not quite a sin.' Those mental images can be overwhelmingly powerful. Beautiful words. Good luck in the competition.
Thank you for your feedback... if you only you could feel how much emotion is contained in those words!