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Well, that's me fucked.I don't even know the difference between a clause and a phrase.
I'll get bang on it.
You can’t truly call yourself peaceful unless you are capable of violence. If you’re not capable of violence, you’re not peaceful. You’re harmless.
Quote by sprite
Clause is the guy who comes down the chimney and leaves presents. Phrase is what they use to shoot people in Star Trek. hope that helps.
Quote by squiffy
Ah-ha! So Clause is the bastard who pinches my milk and cookies every Christmas Eve. Well, he's not getting away with it this year. This year I'll be lying in wait, on guard.
You can’t truly call yourself peaceful unless you are capable of violence. If you’re not capable of violence, you’re not peaceful. You’re harmless.
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Stun him with your phrase.
Yeah, I like it. I best get my phrase gun charged up. 
There's not much of it, as he's not the central character, but I was wondering whether or not this would be acceptable for the site. 
Quote by squiffy
Anyway, I'd like to ask a question. I'm writing a three-part story with each part consisting of about two and half thousand words. I've written in a Jamaican character and used Rastafarian dialect for his dialogue.
If it is, is there a thread anywhere in the forum where I can post some of the dialogue so people can give me their opinion and let me know whether they can understand it?
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Clause is the guy who comes down the chimney and leaves presents. Phrase is what they use to shoot people in Star Trek. hope that helps.
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I knew it. Rachel is a closet StarTrek Fan
Quote by Mazza
I've seen dialogue written that way a few times...
Why not post something in ask the readers or ask the writers?
I'm sure plenty people will be happy to help
Quote by squiffy
I was hooked from the moment I set eyes on Deanna Troy's heaving bosom.
Quote by squiffy
Okay, I'll give that a go later. Thanks for your help.
Quote by Mazza
I wrote in a James Bond-ish accent in this one:
Natural Beauty
(I even recorded an audio of that one... For my sins... My accent is AWFUL!)
Quote by Liz
Seven of Nine...
*drools*
Quote by squiffy
Anyway, I'd like to ask a question. I'm writing a three-part story with each part consisting of about two and half thousand words. I've written in a Jamaican character and used Rastafarian dialect for his dialogue.
If it is, is there a thread anywhere in the forum where I can post some of the dialogue so people can give me their opinion and let me know whether they can understand it?
You can’t truly call yourself peaceful unless you are capable of violence. If you’re not capable of violence, you’re not peaceful. You’re harmless.
Quote by sprite
My thoughts. Often times, having a hint of a 'foreign' dialect is enough to give readers the impression you want - too much, and sometimes it becomes either a chore to read, a little stereotyped, or it comes off as sounding silly (especially if you're not intimately familiar with the dialogue you're pursuing). dropping a phrase, or an occasionally 'accent' works far better than trying to write entirely in the desired dialect. Just my opinion, but yeah, it's a fine line. if he is, as you say, not the central character and doesn't have a lot of dialogue, I'd say you're probably okay.
I know people will think it's daft, but that's just me all over. I am by no means a serious writer. Quote by overmykneenow
From what I see on Lush, few authors improve their writing in a technical sense; the majority of improvement you see in authors is in a growing confidence in skills they already possess but haven't really used before.
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I'm truly grateful to Lush, the readers, and above all the moderators who gave me so much support and encouragement. I hope that Lush will continue to strive...
I would also like to add that the moderators are very kind, caring, and patient.
Quote by Guest
Some people need advice concerning sentence structure -- the fundamentals and how sentences are built around clauses and phrases. They need to be told how to join independent clauses by using semi colons or coordinating conjunctions to avoid the comma splice. How to add a dependent clause to form a complex sentence using subordinating conjunctions. How to connect participle and gerund phrases to clauses to add extra information to a sentence.
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You do realize that about 90% of the native English speaking population understood none of that paragraph, right?
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That may be true, but it doesn't stop us from trying to improve our writers' skill and general understanding.
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I've worked most of my life as a writer/editor...
What struck me during my time as a Lush Mod, (a Senior Mod eventually) was how AWARE my fellow mods were about quality control in EVERY way... Very often, these were people with no practical editorial experience so it was all the more surprising that they rose to the task of editing/moderating/policing the site in such a professional manner. That continues.
The REASON for this, I feel, is that Lush moderators, (almost all of whom are accomplished writers themselves...) have an intrinsic understanding of the ETHOS of our site. Mods are, I feel, INVESTED in our site to a higher degree than more casual members. It's worth pointing out that Mods, (selected generally for above average talent and writing/editorial skills) put their own creativity on the back-burner every time they go to the submissions queue. IT COSTS TO MOD!
It can be VERY stressful in terms of advising on content, grammar, allowed practice, simple quality, etc. (While a Moderator might SCREAM in frustration at some things they see, (I did), the team approach each submitting writer with a degree of of diplomacy and understanding that can frustrate and TAX the Mod whose job it is both to encourage the writer while observing quality standards.)
I've NEVER worked with a more talented or committed bunch of professionals, ESPECIALLY since these people WERE NOT professionals until they stepped up to give something back to the site that (mostly) originally published them.
There is NO TRAINING provided to new moderators, (guidelines etc exist, and the Mod's Forum provides a source of support from the more experienced) but the ACTION of policing a submission is a huge undertaking that all mods take SO VERY SERIOUSLY. You LEARN it by DOING it.
In my time as a moderator, guidelines changed and we as mods had to adapt to the organic changes that make our site what it is, (in my opinion, the best erotic writing site source on the web.)
I'm very proud to be a part of Lush and it's the moderators who insure that the writing I post to this day is not only of a certain quality, but is also standing beside writing of at least equal and often better quality.
Though no longer a Senior Mod, I'm still involved in the site and I'm gratified to know that the team continue to bring a professionalism and talent that enable me as a writer to contribute with pride and a sense of achievement as my work is approved.
So well done, you Mods!
xx SF
You can’t truly call yourself peaceful unless you are capable of violence. If you’re not capable of violence, you’re not peaceful. You’re harmless.
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I've been doing this for 4 years. i've been a senior mod for over 2. i know most of the authors here, having read, modded, or senior modded over their stories. i know which stories i need to read thru carefully, and which i can move through at a fairly quick rate. at one point in time in my career here i was modding 15-20 stories a day - the mod crew was that small at the time. now, i do less. i would say that, on average, we get 50-60 new submissions a day here. it's as simple as this - when that happens, i can jump in and move those stories out very quickly - i am damn good at what i do, and, i may miss a typo here and there while doing it, but i assure you that 99% of the time the stories i mod are clean.
so, to answer your question, yes, i can publish a 3000 word story in 10 minutes. i don't actually read it, but i know what to look for as an editor - there are little tricks i'm learned on how to do that. and, since my name is attached to each and everyone of them, i make SURE nothing goes through that shouldn't.
hope that answers your question for you.
PS - i am probably one of the stingiest mods when it comes out to handing out RRs, too, btw - if you're hoping for one, i would suggest you request someone else to mod your story.
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I've been doing this for 4 years. i've been a senior mod for over 2. i know most of the authors here, having read, modded, or senior modded over their stories. i know which stories i need to read thru carefully, and which i can move through at a fairly quick rate. at one point in time in my career here i was modding 15-20 stories a day - the mod crew was that small at the time. now, i do less. i would say that, on average, we get 50-60 new submissions a day here. it's as simple as this - when that happens, i can jump in and move those stories out very quickly - i am damn good at what i do, and, i may miss a typo here and there while doing it, but i assure you that 99% of the time the stories i mod are clean.
so, to answer your question, yes, i can publish a 3000 word story in 10 minutes. i don't actually read it, but i know what to look for as an editor - there are little tricks i'm learned on how to do that. and, since my name is attached to each and everyone of them, i make SURE nothing goes through that shouldn't.
hope that answers your question for you.
PS - i am probably one of the stingiest mods when it comes out to handing out RRs, too, btw - if you're hoping for one, i would suggest you request someone else to mod your story.
