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Broken Sonnets for a Departed Lover - II

"You're never more alone than when you're in a crowd"

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Standing on the bus, I finding myself weeping
Without control. Solicitous old ladies, leaping
Shakily to their feet, offer me their seats,
Along with tissues and mints, as the streets

Blur past through rain smeared windows.
I feel like one of those scary weirdos
I used to edge away from, despising their
Twitching features and unkempt hair.

I dab at my eyes, despising my overt
Weakness. Why did you choose now to insert
Yourself into that empty hole which once we shared
Where once we danced, our twin souls bared

But which now just burns
Whenever memory returns.

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Comments

Damn him making you feel this way, can feel the pain leaking out of this poem.
I am fortunate to be married to my soulmate, but he spent many years traveling and I am quite familiar with the ache of loneliness. This sonnet touched my heart.
Thank you! It's easier for me to read this again now that I'm in a new (and wonderful) relationship.
Just left a gushing comment on no. 2 - but have to write something here so I can score it...
Thanks - I'm not usually a fan of forced comments, but I'm giving it a go for a bit.
The previous comments said it all.
Simply beautiful. Could feel your emotions as I read your poem
I so understand the loneliness, the empty moments and the lost feeling. I wrote a song called 'Lonely in a Crowded Room'. This touched me so.... Thank you for the emotions you stir. {}
Your feelings that you express in your poetry really touches me. Thank you.
Careful girl you may convert me into poetry this poem is pretty much the way I felt when my wife passed away over 25 years ago and I still feel the emptiness. GREAT POEM
Lovely poem. Sad but lovely.
Lovely poem
Quite sincerely, I was hoping that I might get an opportunity to read another one of your very touching sonnets. As with the first one it ripped right through my heart and left it wide open, and vulnerable. THAT WAS SO VERY BEAUTIFUL!!! It's amazing how such an exciting and fun loving, person like yourself, is able to write something that is so very complicated and deep. It only proves to everyone, just how much talent that you possess as a writer!!! 10+++++++
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The agony and beauty of grief...beautiful poetry xxx
This so beautifully sad. Brava!