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Oh, im sorry, didnt saw it. 
i will try to be here at Thursday and maybe Friday too at 8pm evening and 6am morning. Both cet time. Im not good with timezones. :/
I dont know when the next story will be ready, my motivation is a bit low to write right now. I dont know. I needed someone for proofreading, and back in february someone for quick because my account was about to expire soon then. But in the end i havent had the time and motivation to finish the second story so its still in the working. When im done i will try to correct it the best i can by myself and try to send it in. Maybe it works...
i will try to be here at Thursday and maybe Friday too at 8pm evening and 6am morning. Both cet time. Im not good with timezones. :/I dont know when the next story will be ready, my motivation is a bit low to write right now. I dont know. I needed someone for proofreading, and back in february someone for quick because my account was about to expire soon then. But in the end i havent had the time and motivation to finish the second story so its still in the working. When im done i will try to correct it the best i can by myself and try to send it in. Maybe it works...
My story is published. 
Finally. :D And you can read it in the whole glory https:// www. lushstories.com/stories/bdsm/world-of-pagoia-naidjas-journey.aspx/ But if you like to read more of this world, i really need someone to proofread my english.
Finally. :D And you can read it in the whole glory https:// www. lushstories.com/stories/bdsm/world-of-pagoia-naidjas-journey.aspx/ But if you like to read more of this world, i really need someone to proofread my english. Quote by thekingshayn
It's nice start, but I think you're hurrying it up a bit. Take it slow, and take your time to describe the character, and the environment. Make the readers explore their past. and such. A good story makes the readers build/develop a bond with them. Also, one slight mistake, if you call it that: After he 'came' on her face (and not 'cummed') . Good luck.
Thank you, thats why i asked for help. my english is not so good and yes "came" is better.
And the rest...i dont write literature like harry potter. its just a phantasie, a sexdream if you like. there is no past or much detail, because it would slow down the pace of the bdsm imagination. that would be like watching porn because of the plot. its all aboutwhat the characters do and what they think and feel. like when you start doing it yourself and think about stuff that turns you on, you dont think about the past of the other girl you meet. you just think about her clothes and how she looks and how you have sex with her.
the start has a bit past on it. where Naidja is coming from and what she did in the past days. and then it goes straight to the current bdsm lifestyle. which is where the story unfolds and plot or whatever you want to call it happens. And there are a bit more parts about it further in this story. like when it is nessecary to explain her position of a healslut in the new city. though the actual description of healslut that she has little bit magic power is not that much in it. but its a sexdream and maybe there will be place for healslut description in later stories.
hi there i have a question again. i have submit my story and it is shown as not verified since 5 days. i guess it takes so long because of christmas and everyone is busy. but it has 11 views. what views are these? it is not published and if it are 11 mods than im really wondering why it is not verified. 
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first im sorry but i dont really know where to ask to bdsm people. which are maybe better to ask because you are more likely to enjoy my story and want to help me with it.
second hello all
i finished writing my fictional story about bdsm lifestyle in a fantasy world were men dominent and girls are happy obedient toys. please tell me where i can ask and find people for proofread if this is not the right place for this question. my english is not good enough for submitting. maybe someone here wants to do that. the story is around 7.800 words. i already asked in chat and send it to some people but didnt got much response with corrections.
this is the start of it, bit proofread so far.
The sun was shining on Naidja’s half naked body and heated her nicely. She was wearing a short white tunic made out of sheer fabric, that barely covered her butt and supported her tits to be pushed up and squeezed out, cut deep enough that her round tits are visible all the time. Her legs were covered in nice thigh high leather boots.
The 22 year old girl was holding a small bag with her other clothes and belongings. Like the other girls, she was standing in a line on the deck of the ship, with which they had crossed the ocean. More than a week all the girls were property of the crew. Happily obeying every wish of the men and please them with their tight bodies. Girls were allowed to travel like everyone else. To make the travel not so boring for the girls, men were taking care that the sluts could enjoy serving them and being touched all over their bodies all the time.
During the day Naidja was helping out the cook with preparing the food and being an obedient little toy for his lust. They have had fun when she was ordered to chop vegetables and the cook was just smiling down at her. He enjoyed seeing his cum flowing down her forehead, cheeks and chin, after he shot his load all over her face. She felt so good and proud after he cummed on her face and marked her as a cute cum whore.
During the night she slept with one of the sailors. Like the others girls, she was used by him as his personal mattress. Every night she was lying naked on her back with spread legs, so he can have his way with her. The man was groaning and pounding, until he was satisfied by shooting his sperm into her tight cunt and falling asleep on her. Some mornings she would even wake up in the morning by his motion and noises. In these moments she started to help him with a happy smile by moaning playfully and seemingly enjoying her place under him.
i hope somebody can help me
second hello all
i finished writing my fictional story about bdsm lifestyle in a fantasy world were men dominent and girls are happy obedient toys. please tell me where i can ask and find people for proofread if this is not the right place for this question. my english is not good enough for submitting. maybe someone here wants to do that. the story is around 7.800 words. i already asked in chat and send it to some people but didnt got much response with corrections.this is the start of it, bit proofread so far.
The sun was shining on Naidja’s half naked body and heated her nicely. She was wearing a short white tunic made out of sheer fabric, that barely covered her butt and supported her tits to be pushed up and squeezed out, cut deep enough that her round tits are visible all the time. Her legs were covered in nice thigh high leather boots.
The 22 year old girl was holding a small bag with her other clothes and belongings. Like the other girls, she was standing in a line on the deck of the ship, with which they had crossed the ocean. More than a week all the girls were property of the crew. Happily obeying every wish of the men and please them with their tight bodies. Girls were allowed to travel like everyone else. To make the travel not so boring for the girls, men were taking care that the sluts could enjoy serving them and being touched all over their bodies all the time.
During the day Naidja was helping out the cook with preparing the food and being an obedient little toy for his lust. They have had fun when she was ordered to chop vegetables and the cook was just smiling down at her. He enjoyed seeing his cum flowing down her forehead, cheeks and chin, after he shot his load all over her face. She felt so good and proud after he cummed on her face and marked her as a cute cum whore.
During the night she slept with one of the sailors. Like the others girls, she was used by him as his personal mattress. Every night she was lying naked on her back with spread legs, so he can have his way with her. The man was groaning and pounding, until he was satisfied by shooting his sperm into her tight cunt and falling asleep on her. Some mornings she would even wake up in the morning by his motion and noises. In these moments she started to help him with a happy smile by moaning playfully and seemingly enjoying her place under him.
i hope somebody can help me
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thank you so much it worked now and is now up for verification and approval.
hello i wrote a story myself and wanted to submit it here. i tried it few times and it always says this
Error - General error
Sorry there was a problem processing your request. An email has been sent to Lush admin.
Please go back and try the request again.
I have already send a message at "contact us" too. I dont know what this error is and maybe someone can help me finally submitting my story.
Error - General error
Sorry there was a problem processing your request. An email has been sent to Lush admin.
Please go back and try the request again.
I have already send a message at "contact us" too. I dont know what this error is and maybe someone can help me finally submitting my story.