first im sorry but i dont really know where to ask to bdsm people. which are maybe better to ask because you are more likely to enjoy my story and want to help me with it.
second hello all i finished writing my fictional story about bdsm lifestyle in a fantasy world were men dominent and girls are happy obedient toys. please tell me where i can ask and find people for proofread if this is not the right place for this question. my english is not good enough for submitting. maybe someone here wants to do that. the story is around 7.800 words. i already asked in chat and send it to some people but didnt got much response with corrections.
this is the start of it, bit proofread so far.
The sun was shining on Naidja’s half naked body and heated her nicely. She was wearing a short white tunic made out of sheer fabric, that barely covered her butt and supported her tits to be pushed up and squeezed out, cut deep enough that her round tits are visible all the time. Her legs were covered in nice thigh high leather boots.
The 22 year old girl was holding a small bag with her other clothes and belongings. Like the other girls, she was standing in a line on the deck of the ship, with which they had crossed the ocean. More than a week all the girls were property of the crew. Happily obeying every wish of the men and please them with their tight bodies. Girls were allowed to travel like everyone else. To make the travel not so boring for the girls, men were taking care that the sluts could enjoy serving them and being touched all over their bodies all the time.
During the day Naidja was helping out the cook with preparing the food and being an obedient little toy for his lust. They have had fun when she was ordered to chop vegetables and the cook was just smiling down at her. He enjoyed seeing his cum flowing down her forehead, cheeks and chin, after he shot his load all over her face. She felt so good and proud after he cummed on her face and marked her as a cute cum whore.
During the night she slept with one of the sailors. Like the others girls, she was used by him as his personal mattress. Every night she was lying naked on her back with spread legs, so he can have his way with her. The man was groaning and pounding, until he was satisfied by shooting his sperm into her tight cunt and falling asleep on her. Some mornings she would even wake up in the morning by his motion and noises. In these moments she started to help him with a happy smile by moaning playfully and seemingly enjoying her place under him.
i hope somebody can help me