Glittering dewdrops
Frostbit petals curling wide
This chill front's lifting
Slide inside me now
Thrusting like peals of thunder
Make me ring my bell
Showerhead splashes
But I'm lost in your hard heat
I'll make you splash too
Blue bruise tells a tale
A good hard bang, with a bang
This hip is quite sore
The kettle whistles
But it must wait a moment
Till I'm done with you
Alone in my perch
I long for warm winds, clear skies
When my lover comes
Waves of wind blow sand
November beaches barren
Gray like frozen hearts
Autumn's icy breath
Bares more than sullen branches
My pierced nipples perk
Branches scratch the pane
Sudden winds shake my dreamland
Utopia fled
Hint of pineapples
Two buttons rendered useless
My eyes are up here
A few years ago, when I wrote a story every couple of months, instead of every couple of years , I kept making 'realism' my watchword. But in hindsight, I'm not sure what I thought I meant. I don't think characters have to be "well-rounded" in the classroom sense. Erotic "realism" is more about overhearing the characters' wishes, desires, inhibitions in a sexual situation.
Like, when I reread Anais Nin now, I find her stories are like sketches, smudged in, impressionistic. Everything feels like something happening in a half-dream, and I recognize now how much I really like that. The interior lives of her players are all about moods. I don't think a writer has to fuss over background, as long as we get a feel for how the characters relate to their own, or others', desires as the erotic situation unfolds. Even if it's just shadows moving in the eyes of mechanical copulating dolls, I think that works. Just a glance of shame or exhilaration, or both, can be enough psychology to make the story memorable.
Sprite can write the multi-chapter, more character-driven stories I used to attempt, but also is great with pulpy scenarios that I can never pull off. I envy this. Whenever I attempt a story now, I'm always trying to strip strip strip it down. If you can pull off simplicity in smut, I think that's a virtue.
Of course, this goes a ways to explain why I keep to poems!
Erotic chatting
Just the one special someone
Flirty-full banter
Mmm, tastes like split peaches! yum . . .
Sit between her legs and use my tongue, mmm . . .
Granted, but after 3 days everyone's bum is so sore!
I wish someone would tell me a story . . .
Get out some high-class moisteurizer . . .
My Lady sets the example . . .
Sore bottoms and Nivea cream
I know the bottom runs the show, but what good does it do me to bend over if you're tied up?
Oh, everyone wants to run the show!
While the whole staff is watching . . .
With a book of poetry in one hand while I accept her strap-on.
Oh dear: Lady Gaga has "older CDs" already, has she? . . . I think I forgot which floor I'm on in the nursing home . . . lol
Granted, but the aristocracy is so punctilious in disciplining the naughty . . . .
I wish I had a parasol made for two
The rule in erotica writing that 'if it doesn't turn you on, it won't turn on your readers' is probably as fundamental as it gets.
That said, the aspect of the 'turn-onedness' is probably different for different writers. For me, if I'm in a groove with writing a story (or specifically, the sex scene/s in them) the arousal definitely is there, but it's something I have to kindof sit on and sublimate into the writing. Like any good teasing game, there has to be a component of discipline!
Sometimes I've gone back to old stories and been surprised to get excited over them and have that feeling of "Wait, did I say that?!" If the story reads a lot dirtier thanI ever remembered it being, that's a very flattering sensation. A bit of a shock, but a nice one.
I think all good writing, or reading, should be *oral* to some degree. If not read out loud then at least being spoken within the mind.
Of course, depending on content and company that *can* be a problem!
But I strongly recommend trying it at least. Ideally everything should have a rhythm, a certain cadence, each syllable have the smoothness, the rasp, the lilt or the heft demanded of it by a certain invisible architecture, that reveals itself in air as words are made sound.
Or, if that's too poncy, just think how much better all those 'mmm, fuck, oh--right there aaaah!'s sound once you give them a signature voice. Or get your honey to read them to you!
Like most of the rest of you, I agree there's little point in bestowing the '3 or below' scores: work that isn't going to pan out well usually shows itself early on in the poor writing. So really it's like beating up on Timmy's refrigerator drawing for not being a Michelangelo. If other readers really find those stories float their boat, well and good; but it's not really necessary to warn other people off bad writing that exposes itself as such.
But to the original question: no, I can't find anything strange about 'peer-reviewing' the work of writers. I'm sure that the critiques of other writers are much more satisfying than those of casual readers, and are much more likely to understand what one is trying to do (also more sympathetic to what has been attempted, even if it's a failure!). Likewise, it's especially pleasurable to find writers who are nailing their craft, surmounting the same obstacles that one has struggled (perhaps, *still* struggles!) with. Another writer is less likely, I think, to just be flattering you because you talk dirty-- they understand what has to go into writing. There's nothing awkward in that, certainly not for me.
Anyway, if you need to evaluate a plumber, ask a plumber (just not the plumber's son or something!). Ditto writing
Personally, no but: It (the original) really makes an adorable image!
As for the torso surface piercings: it's kinda cool in a fantasy way, but the idea of living even a week with that seems hellish.
The labia piercings, tho, can certainly be borne with, if one is so inclined