Down There Problems

In every erotic story that I write, a similar problem occurs when the scene gets hot and heavy. Particularly when I want the mood to be romantic I am at a loss for words for the penis and vagina. I feel a few terms that work in modern pieces, such as cock and pussy aren't too bad.

Most vernacular around those parts come off as crude or academic in my mind, often breaking what was otherwise a very nice flow. So I'm hoping to hear some of your favorite terms for genitals in erotic writing. The more the merrier, because if I dance around it too much I sound like an old religious woman trying to describe a personal problem to a doctor.

I don't think you have to use the words, especially if writing a romantic scene. To me, writing, "He eased himself inside of her," can be better than, "He rammed his cock in her pussy."

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I don't think you have to use the words, especially if writing a romantic scene. To me, writing, "He eased himself inside of her," can be better than, "He rammed his cock in her pussy."

Yeah, but some other activities, like oral or manual stimulation, can be harder to describe without mentioning the organs involved. And even with your example, you might need to be explicit about which hole he eased into, depending on situation.😗 But, yes, I find things like what you suggest are good to salt in with more explicit ones.

I don't like using the same word all through my stories, so even when using cock and pussy I will occasionally throw in a snatch or opening ... and, in one story, even quim. There is of course, prick, dick, willy, todger ... not that I've ever used John Thomas, so far, but truncheon and joystick made an appearance in my Noir story. Steely shaft is alliterative which is never a bad thing.

I think personally you can’t go wrong with cunt though I know some people find it offensive. I have used pussy but I always feel it’s a bit naff but I quite agree we need more terms

I blame Dr Johnson who deliberately excluded the many terms in use for the vagina from his dictionary

Cock, dick and shaft seem to cover it for the men.

This is a really legit problem in writing erotica for me. It reminds me of dialogue tags: using the word "said" over and over is like using the word "cock" over and over. Changing it up (replied, throbbing member) only draws attention to you NOT using the word. I tend to just use the same word over and over, but try to write sentences that avoid the word (Kimmie's strategy, up above in the thread).

I feel your pain. Here's a naughty bits reference: https://laurelclarke.wordpress.com/2014/08/18/sexy-thesaurus-romance-erotica-words/

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This is a really legit problem in writing erotica for me. It reminds me of dialogue tags: using the word "said" over and over is like using the word "cock" over and over. Changing it up (replied, throbbing member) only draws attention to you NOT using the word. I tend to just use the same word over and over, but try to write sentences that avoid the word (Kimmie's strategy, up above in the thread).

Never thought if it that way. When I check my story for frequently used words, 'cock' is always in the top 20, so I try to use replacement words. But goddammit, this is a good point.

I don’t like using “cock” over and over. I keep a list of synonyms for cock, pussy and tits to reduce the repetition. I also tend to go heavy on alliteration (“pulsing prick,” “slippery slot,” “fantastic phallus”) to add to the variety.

I read this before I submitted my first entry and thought "what a load of shit".

Now that I have submitted a story, I completely understand the post.

In the past, I've used a lot of "throbbing dicks" and "inner walls" and other such descriptive words and terms that will quickly add up and clutter the sentences and break the flow during a crucial (or the central) scene.

My current writing shows efforts to move away from describing in favour of showing and painting what my characters feel. In a romantic context, what is paramount is what the lovers feel for one another.

In my next chapter, there will be a scene of incestuous sex between brother and sister. I'll have to think of all the emotions the two of them go through, and how on earth they end up having sex in the first place. My male character will be gripped by the enormity of what he's doing and become a prisoner of what can never be undone. I don't want to describe bodyparts here; I want to depict emotions and the sense of extreme transgression mixed with extreme sexual pleasure as well.

In other contexts, such as a glamorous, well-dressed woman who gets gang-fucked by sweaty boxers in a seedy downtown gym, words such as "dick", "cunt" will be perfect to convey the atmosphere where a bunch of motherfuckers are whoring that lady who now feels like a dirty slut as she takes their jizz inside and all over her -- and she loves this.

If the words you are using are contributing to your story on other, deeper levels or intensifying something meaningful, then your run-of-the-mill words will produce a more powerful effect, much like pawns occupying a key position on a chessboard.