If there is any story moderators on or other writers which would sound better, in your opinion? This Karly mentally stated; angrily and irritated. " or " Karly mentally stated in angered,irritated tone."
(the second part one i mentioned wanted to capture the readers mind of how the character feels and how she expresses herself?)
(every little bit helps me out big time.)
Why say "mentally state" when you could say "think". That way, no one has to work out what you mean.
Personally, internal dialogue is lazy writing. Show readers what your characters are thinking, don't tell them. There are some great articles online that can give you some great examples of how to write in a more "show, don't tell" style.
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Why not read some stories instead
NEW! Want a quick read for your coffee break? Why not try this... Flash Erotica: Scrubber Also there is one other thing I wanted to ask, the story mods was I know some a very particular. When it comes to grammar and puncation, and some spelling. Would I be able to get away with certain words like? Ok and Tho even tho you know their meanings put spelt different.
There also was one other thing, I wanted to know about. When you write a story in chapter form, Can I break a chapter into parts? Okay, I'll give you an example: If you read a book that has chapters in them chapter has, maybe 1 or 2 or 3 parts to it, and then It goes to a new chapter. can I include the second part of a chapter in my story? cause I fear of going over the word limit sometimes . I don't want it to be too short, too long. I never was told on lush I could do it just wanted confirmation on that. By the way, I thought this was ok the ask, someone told me once, No question is a stupid question.
I think long sentences are better than short ones also lots of adjectives. what people are thinking and lots of dialogue are also entertaining. any action before the deed is as important as the act itself. and no repetitive words