Anybody ever consider writing something here in the second person? I thing that would be a very interesting read.
And I've only begun fucking with you people.
At the end of the day, it's all math.
There are plenty of second person stories here and, by and large, they're awful.
One of the mantras of creative writing is "show, don't tell". Second person stories are all tell and no show.
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Why not read some stories instead
NEW! Want a quick read for your coffee break? Why not try this... Flash Erotica: Scrubber They seem to bore me, for the most part. Just don't find that style exciting.
I tried writing second person - turn out to be trash - most of the second person stories I've read are that way, it just doesn't click right
I stick with either first or third - most of my non-erotic is first - my multi-chapter one here (2nd chapter almost ready for final edit) is third with my short-story being first
You're excited. The thrilling energy of it buzzes over you're skin. The hand on the clock ticks by - another long, slow, fat second. You're not sure if you can take any more of this waiting. You have no choice, though.
He walks toward you, loose change jingling in his pocket, hand cuffs hanging from his hand. The dark metal of the cuffs glints in the the light, ominously.
- I see why it's fun for authors, but if your a reader it's insufferable.
I think that's good advice, Rumple. If you can't outdo Dancing_Doll's Hard Candy, please spare the rest of us.
I think the success of her attempt is in the way she keeps it to the "I" and "you" characters. She lets us inside the mind of her first person, but limits her description of the second person to only what her "I" character can observe.
DamonX did the same with Wedding Day, although not quite as seamlessly. Reading both stories, told from different perspectives, I found that I was able to put myself in the place of Doll's "you", like she was telling her story to me, and Damon's "I", like I was reliving it.
Unlike the brief and already tortured example Metilda posted. Don't tell me how to feel, man!
My latest story is a racy little piece about what happens when someone cute from work invites you over to watch Netflix and Chill. 
