Hi,
My name is Aquadude, and I wrote two stories. I got one comment. Obviously I didn't do something right. Is there something that I could do to bring in some feedback?
Thanks
Aquadude, fer sure.
I'll read them and comment.
not this second, but I will.
sorry to hear that.
xxx
I read both your stories and they are not bad. Stop putting yourself down too, there's many out there who want to do it for you. You did not do anything wrong. You have good words but you need to study some techniques. You tend to tell us what's going to happen or happened then tell us how it happened. Epode get confused and you lose their excitement. It's all about getting them excited and keeping them there.
"...her orgasm could be the eighth wonder of the world..." Was great. Descriptive and short and it allows us to add detail of our own that makes it even better.
You're drawing pictures with words to excite someone you do not even know.
Read yours back, record them if you need to and listen then decide if it's exciting. I use a Speak utility to read them back and that stilted, choppy alien voice shows me problems. I'm new here too but I've learned a lot from all the really good authors here. If anything I said helps I'm glad. I remember submitting my first story too and thinking I'll never be able to do this. I usually prove myself wrong when I do that though.
The "Just Do It" sticker applies here so get one for over jour work area.
Good fortune with this.
It is a struggle. But listen to Sprite. Its a bit of a popularity contest. Begging helps too! See? I just went and commented one of your stories. Maybe I should try this!
Thank you all! I will try to follow all of this good advice.
Thank you thank you thank you.
Aquadude