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Question for the Floor: Using descriptions of living people in text

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Now say I'm describing someone as being a tall handsome looking chap, am I allowed to say he looks like a silver fox George Clooney?

If I say a man speaks with a deep rolling voice, and I allowed to say he sounds like Sydney Greenstreet from the Maltese Falcon?

So far I've been very good and not made mention of a single living soul apart from people who are most definitely not well known figures.
Most of the sluttier actions have been done by me, and I don't intend to sue myself for libel, at least not yet.


What says the wisdom of the Floor or more importantly the Fearsome Mods?

Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

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You're allowed, but it's considered (at least by me!) lazy writing to liken someone to a celebrity and leave it at that.

For starters, it doesn't help if the reader's not heard of said person. Likening someone to a Bollywood film star or someone in a US soap opera is only likely to mean anything to people who watch them.

Secondly, there are a bajillion ways to describe George Clooneyesque characters or whoever Sydney Greenstreet was using words, and the fun in conjuring images in people's heads is to use those words to the best possible effect. My favourite descriptions I've read in the media:

1. (of Tom Hanks) Acted like a lump of dough with a wig on.
2. (of Mick Jagger) A face like a flannel hanging on a doorknob.
3. (of Keanu Reeves) There's a faint whiff of varnish every time he appears on-screen.

There are loads of lovely ways you can liven up writing without using a laundry list of attributes.

e.g. if someone's taller, instead of: He was 6'2" and I had to stand on tiptoe to kiss him.
You could say: He placed a fingertip under my chin and tilted me to his lips until I was on tiptoe.

The key is to let your imagination run wild.

Hope the advice of this Fearsome Mod helps

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Now say I'm describing someone as being a tall handsome looking chap, am I allowed to say he looks like a silver fox George Clooney?

If I say a man speaks with a deep rolling voice, and I allowed to say he sounds like Sydney Greenstreet from the Maltese Falcon?

So far I've been very good and not made mention of a single living soul apart from people who are most definitely not well known figures.
Most of the sluttier actions have been done by me, and I don't intend to sue myself for libel, at least not yet.

What says the wisdom of the Floor or more importantly the Fearsome Mods?


I've done this a couple of times. Once because my protagonist was at a fancy dress party and I was conveying the impression the others she encountered at the bash were having on her.

The other time, the entire basis of the plot was based the protagonist looking like Sylvia Plath. One particular photograph of Sylvia totally captured me and the story just came to me. (For anyone interested, see my story: https://www.lushstories.com/stories/lesbian/-natalie-and-ruth-student-and-lecturer.aspx)

I agree with what WW said above, that to short cut to character building by describing the people you writing about as looking as like someone in the public sphere is lazy writing. WW makes a number excellent points in his post.

. . . but I'm not sure if this is really the thrust of your question. Is it more that you are worried about breaking some Lush bi-law, or are afraid of being sued by the person you are likening you character to?

If the latter, just to be sure, probably best stay away from the living or recently departed.


I'm sure one of the other mods will be along to clarify Lush's policy.
Comparisons are fine.

Actually mentioning celebs in stories is also fine, so long as they're not the focus and aren't up to any nefarious deeds. E.g. You could have a story set in Hollywood and fist-bump Chris Hemsworth in passing on a red carpet or something. That should be fine.

Just no fanfic and no obviously made up people who are actually just like real people. Pretty sure we've had a few suspiciously orange coloured Ronald Crumps trying to sneak through with wide eyed innocent claims it's not based on anyone in particular.
Thank you wise and fearsome mods for such helpful advice.

As a place holder I put in a celeb name or trait but since it is lazy to leave it there will convert the placeholder into a proper description.


For example instead of Sydney Greenstreet, I gave them a plumy English public school voice that dripped with charm and confidence.

I must also say, that I've asked a few of these kinds of questions around here and instead of being whacked with a read this followed by a link to some section of the rules, I get properly considered helpful advice.
I'm still learning how to bring the magic when I write so being able to ask these questions without fear of a Modhammer and to get helpful responses really is appreciated.
I know there's a tonne of demands on your time and I'm genuinely touched when I get such practical answers.

Genuinely thank you all.

It helps me to be a better writer and avoid falling into sloppy habits that might be tough to shake off.

Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

I've been listening to my kinky pencil here's my current work

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Pretty sure we've had a few suspiciously orange coloured Ronald Crumps trying to sneak through with wide eyed innocent claims it's not based on anyone in particular.


Please, please, please link a couple for us. We have to sweat through 24 more hours of that feckless knob of a President. It would ease my fears.

Not a mod, and yes, my first instinct was exactly what WW said--lazy writing--but lazy ways are sometimes effective ways. I think if how you first see a character is "he looked like Richard Nixon after a five day coke bender," that's a shorthand that gets both you and the reader to the place you wanna go very quickly.

In other words, trust your writing. If your brain suggests a living person, dig into the "why" behind it a little. It might work.
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"he looked like Richard Nixon after a five day coke bender," that's a shorthand that gets both you and the reader to the place you wanna go very quickly.


As long as they old enough or interested in ancient history enough to know who Richard Nixon was and what he looked like. Which is not a given with millennials and younger. Even my staff at work miss some of my references to stuff that predates them and they are a pretty smart bunch (all are millennials). So I've got to throw down with WW, though more because it's a risky proposition unless the person you cite is very, very well-known and has kind of transcended their place in history. Marilyn Monroe might be one, though I'd have to test that out on my son to be sure (he's 21).
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For descriptions of people, I like: He looked just like Bradley Cooper, if Bradley Cooper was 4'9' tall. And bald. With a pot belly and a forest of nose hairs, countless facial moles, and walked with a limp... etc.