I've been fortunate to have an excellent editor critique my last few stories before publication. This person didn't just spot obvious misusages, mistypes, poor grammar, etc. They also changed sentences that weren't incorrect to make them better. For example, changing the way I said something to make the important part of the sentence stand out, making compound sentences so everything wasn't so chronological. (Then she said... Then she did this... then she did that, etc).
Due to some personal issues, they no longer have time to help me. I really hate going back to publishing without an editor.
I wonder if there are volunteer editors on this site that will help. I hope to find someone that really understands how to put a paragraph together.