Some more advice on writing stories (politely given so as not to upset anyone who then decides that they need to report me to the powers that be).

So... if you're having sex with someone? you usually know their name. it's usually pretty intimate, so addressing them by name every time you say something is kind of... not necessary.

here's an example of what not to do.

"I want to fuck you Lily."

"I want you to fuck me too, Fred."

"I'm gonna stuff my cock in your pussy, Lily."

"Omg, that feels so good, Fred."

"You like that, Lily?"

"I like it, Fred."

"I'm going to cum, Lily.:

"Cum for me, Fred. I want to feel your hot sperm in my pussy."

"I'm cumming, Lily."

"Me too, Fred."

i mean, do you talk like this when you're actually fucking someone?

Just more helpful advice.

Word, Lily.

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So... if you're having sex with someone? you usually know their name.

I plead the fifth.

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So... if you're having sex with someone? you usually know their name. it's usually pretty intimate, so addressing them by name every time you say something is kind of... not necessary.

here's an example of what not to do.

"I want to fuck you Lily."

"I want you to fuck me too, Fred."

"I'm gonna stuff my cock in your pussy, Lily."

"Omg, that feels so good, Fred."

"You like that, Lily?"

"I like it, Fred."

"I'm going to cum, Lily.:

"Cum for me, Fred. I want to feel your hot sperm in my pussy."

"I'm cumming, Lily."

"Me too, Fred."

i mean, do you talk like this when you're actually fucking someone?

Just more helpful advice.

OMG... thats just too spooky... thats my dialogue almost to the letter. Except you forget my last line "Pass the tissues and put the kettle on whatever your name is"😊

You're supposed to talk during sex? Really? Well, that explains a few things...

🙄 I am not the best at English dialogue, but at least I have an excuse.

My mouth is usually too full of cock.

As my husband says, I shall get my coat.

Can't help but post it

Man, I wish people would use vocative commas as properly as sprite does! Instead, we end up with

"Do you like that Lily?"

and we're left wondering whatever happened to this Lily.

Personal favorites:

"Give me that cum baby!" (A cum baby sounds like something out of a David Cronenberg movie.)

"Kiss me mum!" (an' then me da', and then we'll go for a pint, ya wanker.)

"I know Fred." (You should. You're in the middle of a conversation with him right then.)

Most of this pain could be avoided if y'all just stopped it with the personal addresses... 😬

/modrant

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Man, I wish people would use vocative commas as properly as sprite does! Instead, we end up with

"Do you like that Lily?"

and we're left wondering whatever happened to this Lily.

Personal favorites:

"Give me that cum baby!" (A cum baby sounds like something out of a David Cronenberg movie.)

"Kiss me mum!" (an' then me da', and then we'll go for a pint, ya wanker.)

"I know Fred." (You should. You're in the middle of a conversation with him right then.)

Most of this pain could be avoided if y'all just stopped it with the personal addresses... 😬

/modrant

Noted Cydia.

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Noted Cydia.