There are some comments made beneath your story JoJ.
The story is nicely descriptive and believable - a great first attempt, and a perfect story for a sequel.
I do find it hard to read stories with so many spelling mistakes though. Run it through a spellchecker prior to submitting next time please. Basic things like "jsut" can be excused once, but when the mistake occurs 3 or 4 times it looks careless - "taisted" as well.
I'm looking forward to seeing some more of your work
Most word processing software has one built in. What program do you use? MS Word is the most common. If you are writing it in a flat file format like wordpad or notepad, you can put the text into an online spell checker, like this place http://www.spellcheck.net/