Turn-off and Deal Breakers for Readers

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Any story for me that has the women with 38EE breasts makes me sorry for their backache than any future sexiness.

I think that was about my partner’s measurements when she nursed. The pain was real. At this point she swapped from bras to corsets and stays for a few years till they got back under control.

btw, i see lots of stories where people are getting 'flipped over'. the image is kind of comical (to me). i'm picturing gymnasts or circus performers lol

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btw, i see lots of stories where people are getting 'flipped over'. the image is kind of comical (to me). i'm picturing gymnasts or circus performers lol

Especially when there’s a dick inserted… Like are you spinning them on your cock?

I don’t think I have the experience(ability) to suggest what the components of a well written story should be. They are after all what the individual reader finds enjoyable as opposed to a rigid format of dos and don’t’s. Isn’t all about creativity?

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I think that was about my partner’s measurements when she nursed. The pain was real. At this point she swapped from bras to corsets and stays for a few years till they got back under control.

My god, your poor wife. I hope she is okay now. I would have no idea what I would do with such... things. I do like corsets, though, even if I am not so blessed.

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Isn’t all about creativity?

Yes, exactly.

Maria was a blue-eyed nineteen-year-old beauty, 120 pounds with a buttle butt I loved to spank when we fucked. Her 36DD tits wobbled in her tight cheerleading outfit. She swayed in her tiny plaid skirt and white panties that clung to her wet pussy beneath, long auburn hair bobbing around my shaft with each slurp. "Good girl. Take everything," I commanded.

Vs:

Maria gazed up at me, baby blues piercing my resolve as she engulfed my cock. I knew that fucking my student was wrong, but who could resist that chest bursting from her cheerleading top? Her sylphlike frame swayed as she slurped, the bubble butt I adored to spank covered only by a scrap of plaid skirt. She'd flashed her virginal panties before sinking to her knees and unbuckling me, the outline of her bare pussy clearly defined. And wet. Brushing away an auburn bang, I stroked her cheek before slipping my grip to tangle her mane and urged her deeper. "Good girl."

Poor writing is the worst. Changing voice in the middle of a paragraph, completely undeveloped characters, grammatical errors, as well as overuse of words and phrases. It’s jolting to be brought out of a world because you’re confused about what’s happening or what the misspelled word is supposed to be or a hard eye roll from a series of clichés.

Clinical, data-driven descriptions. That's a no!

Measures, repetitive structures, the enumeration of actions with no transition. I feel like I'm reading a plot checklist.

Personal pet peeve is love canal.

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Measures, repetitive structures, the enumeration of actions with no transition. I feel like I'm reading a plot checklist.

Personal pet peeve is love canal.

Love Canal - I had to look this up.

My God. 😨

The Lush reader is provided stories to read through the approval process of the voluntary moderators. I have found these moderators not only insightful in terms of the depth of their knowledge of the rules of writing but thus far, without exception, they are always gifted authors themselves. Their tastes and mine do not always correspond but their skills continue to amaze me. The quality of writing , for the most part, on Lush is what sets it apart.

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Poor writing is the worst. Changing voice in the middle of a paragraph, completely undeveloped characters, grammatical errors, as well as overuse of words and phrases. It’s jolting to be brought out of a world because you’re confused about what’s happening or what the misspelled word is supposed to be or a hard eye roll from a series of clichés.

Dearest Jillian I apologize with all my heart but I am just learning. Periodically I get something through the moderator gauntlet, but I will try to create something that avoids all the hurdles inexperience sets up. ❤️

stories that have lots (or any) of this. OH MY GOD, FUCK ME BABY, STICK THAT BIG COCK IN ME. OH MY GOD, I AM CUMMING. YES! YES! YES! YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!

Wow, that was hot. I love your story-telling. Hope you write more

Breeding/impregnating, MM sex (Just not my thing), and impossible scenarios,

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Measures, repetitive structures, the enumeration of actions with no transition. I feel like I'm reading a plot checklist.

Personal pet peeve is love canal.

As a euphemism for vagina, or in terms of the environmental disaster? I can't see it used for the first without thinking of the second, so yes, not very erotic. I'm not into pain, humiliation, or degradation, or as mentioned above breeding/impregnating, but that's a category thing so I just avoid those categories.

As far as style, the clinical descriptions of every physical feature and the ages of all the characters, all crammed into the first paragraph or 2, will generally ensure that I read no farther. Yes, Lush has minimum age limits for story characters, but show it by actions or experience, or work it in gently, don't jam it in the reader's face.

It's ok to work to a plot or outline, but you shouldn't be writing to a checklist - or punch list, as they call them in the trades. It kills all sense of natural flow.

Stilted, awkward, unnatural dialog is also a bridge too far for me. Read it back out loud and ask yourself if you've ever heard anyone talk like that.

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What happens in an erotic story that makes you walk away? I'm not looking for kinks or topics that you just don't find appealing. I'm more interested in a story that you would otherwise enjoy and something happens that just hits the brakes for you.

My personal example would be bad pillow talk. I've been really into some stories and things get hot and heavy. Then a character rolls off something entirely inane, flow breaking, or out of character. I read a story that was sweet and sexy, then during the act (as a character was losing her virginity) she starts saying things like, "Use me like your dirty whore. Beat me and punish me! Choke me and spit on me!"

I was like, 'damn girl, you just had your first kiss 2 days ago.' When I get pulled from the moment so abruptly I just don't want to go on.

So what about you guys? What sort of things should writers avoid?

I am also turned off by similar scenarios.

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As a euphemism for vagina, or in terms of the environmental disaster? I can't see it used for the first without thinking of the second, so yes, not very erotic. I'm not into pain, humiliation, or degradation, or as mentioned above breeding/impregnating, but that's a category thing so I just avoid those categories.

As far as style, the clinical descriptions of every physical feature and the ages of all the characters, all crammed into the first paragraph or 2, will generally ensure that I read no farther. Yes, Lush has minimum age limits for story characters, but show it by actions or experience, or work it in gently, don't jam it in the reader's face.

It's ok to work to a plot or outline, but you shouldn't be writing to a checklist - or punch list, as they call them in the trades. It kills all sense of natural flow.

Stilted, awkward, unnatural dialog is also a bridge too far for me. Read it back out loud and ask yourself if you've ever heard anyone talk like that.

when people keep using names. i mean, who does that?

Want to have sex, Jim?

I sure do, Lucy.

Ok, Jim, let's go.

God you are hot, Lucy.

Your cock makes me horny, Jim.

Gonna fuck you til you scream, Lucy...

I mean, are they afraid they won't know who they are talking to? Being in a relationship, the only time I use my wife's name is if i'm trying to get her attention. so much better than "hey you!"

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As a euphemism for vagina, or in terms of the environmental disaster?

You made laugh. And completely agree with all your other points.

"More to cum"

makes me want to definitely not read another chapter, and ideally un-read what I just read.

Stop it. Please.

The minute a story starts to sermonize, I'm gone.

Political/religious sniping of any kind.

Cliches.

Belabored, clinical narration.

All-caps climaxes.

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Being in a relationship, the only time I use my wife's name is if i'm trying to get her attention. so much better than "hey you!"

You mean I 'm doing it wrong after all this time when I yell, "Hey you, get me a tea."🤣

I find names have a place in dialogue but I sometimes struggle with getting that place right. Usually if they are saying something that requires emphasis or attention.

"Listen to me, Paul. I need you in me now."

"Like I need another invitation," he responded, unzipping his fly.

Names are fine, in moderation, for emphasis. I use that in my Tabby: Cheating Colleague series when he refers to her by her Sunday name.

But in your example, if he'd responded: "Like I need another invitation, Lily." and she'd said, "Wow, you're so big, Paul." then it wouldn't appear as natural.

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she'd said, "Wow, you're so big, Paul." then it wouldn't appear as natural.

Bunyan?

When there is little storyline and it's all about the sex, and the sex itself is described in all its minute details, then I think that story is not for me. For me, this is written porn.

For me, writing errotica is sharing one's fantasies through a story, and not trying to dazzle readers. Consequently, I don't like it when I feel a writer is trying too hard to please the crowd; yes, you feel this; it restricts the flow and bends the characters and plotline to fit into established, crowd-pleasing tropes.

I have infinite respect for those writers who have the courage of writing the stories they really want to write, with the characters they want and who turn them on, cliché or no cliché, even when it means low ratings.

I also admire all my fellow writers who meet writing standards and post stories here on LS when English isn't their first language.

My top 3 turn-offs when reading are wooden characters with no feelings / emotions, unrealistic dialogue (especially continual use of names) and being told the characters’ ages or physical dimensions in the first paragraph. I think good writers work on the idea of show, not tell.

I stay out of the genres that are a turn off for me, so that helps a lot. Screamers in bed, especially with looooong, drawn out wooorrrds. Character inconsistencies, like a virgin saying, "Use me as your dirty cum dumpster." Physical impossibilities, like digging a ditch in a string bikini or having full on intercourse while driving. Sex without plot. Plot without sex.

In addition to my earlier post on the topic, stories that feature "You" as a character just don't do it for me, for some reason. That entire, "I run my hand up under your skirt, and you moan," stuff just fails to pull me into the hopefully-shared fantasy the author is trying to achieve.

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In addition to my earlier post on the topic, stories that feature "You" as a character just don't do it for me, for some reason. That entire, "I run my hand up under your skirt, and you moan," stuff just fails to pull me into the hopefully-shared fantasy the author is trying to achieve.

Pretty sure way to stop me reading a hetero story. As a lesbian, it gets creepy real fast.

Second person is a bitch to make sexy. I think I've tried it, like, once in prose, and even then I cheated and made it a letter format. Not going there again.

Let's be real, not all boobs are DD, DDD.

Give me a B or C cup any day!