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Perspective when writing a cuckold story

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Twisted_Skald
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Now I'm no expert on being a cuckold, I got the wrong parts for a start.
I did want to ask the great wisdom of the room, if one is doing a female centric cuck story, that's at least semi autobiograpical I wanted to check something.

Should one keep the observer's emotional state to merely being mentioned at the start and end of the sex descriptions, or is it ok to interweave the action with the observers perspective?

I'm not a reader of the genre, yes I probably should read one before I start, but I wanted to check if there was a strong feeling either way from the reader base.

Essentially if A takes C to bed while B watches. Is it important to know how B is feeling as the scene unfolds, or is it better to just leave it to the end?

I've got great help before when I asked these kinds of questions so I'm hoping you can help me make this one an extra spicy one.
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deviantsusie
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I think it depends on whose story it is. Are we watching it from A's perspective. Do we see A look at B and grin as she sees the jealousy or discomfort in their eyes? If it is an omnipotent global view of everyone, you could jump from person to person, focussing on A's thoughts, then C's, then B's then A's again etc... personally, I think if B gets plonked in the chair to watch and we get a whole sex scene just focussing on A and C, then we don't feel anything for B.

I don't know if that helps. I like writing stories from multiple perspectives so that would be the route I go but yours might be completely different. smile

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Twisted_Skald
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Quote by deviantsusie
I think it depends on whose story it is. Are we watching it from A's perspective. Do we see A look at B and grin as she sees the jealousy or discomfort in their eyes? If it is an omnipotent global view of everyone, you could jump from person to person, focussing on A's thoughts, then C's, then B's then A's again etc... personally, I think if B gets plonked in the chair to watch and we get a whole sex scene just focussing on A and C, then we don't feel anything for B.

I don't know if that helps. I like writing stories from multiple perspectives so that would be the route I go but yours might be completely different. smile


Thank you susie,
It's exactly what I needed to know.
I was planning on mostly keeping the focus on A and B. C being mostly a pawn to A and a source of annoyance to B.
Will write up a proper draft and see how it goes.
I just wanted to make sure that having 2 primary actors with a patsy in the middle was ok.
I'm going to be B while A lives out a fantasy and pretends it's to address my jealousy issues.

Your comments are not only appreciated but completely vital to helping me get this done properly.

So C is mostly a poor dupe that A used for her pleasure and I get to go through an emotional journey.

Will write it up and see how it goes.
Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

I've been listening to my kinky pencil here's my current work

My current Competition entry is here
A Cure For Stagefright

I put a little banner in here, it might change. I'm still messing about with it.
letsgonow69
Active Ink Slinger
Perhaps this is a story to be co-written with a man. Interweave both parts of the story.
Twisted_Skald
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Quote by letsgonow69
Perhaps this is a story to be co-written with a man. Interweave both parts of the story.


Ooh that might be a fun idea.
Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

I've been listening to my kinky pencil here's my current work

My current Competition entry is here
A Cure For Stagefright

I put a little banner in here, it might change. I'm still messing about with it.
DaisyChained
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So C is mostly a poor dupe that A used for her pleasure and I get to go through an emotional journey.



Hi Michelle

I guess it depends on your story. My cuckold story made C the protagonist and the story was written through her eyes. I wanted to try something different, and I got an RR, so I think it worked.

I don’t know how to post a link, but it was called A Thousand Miles if you want to take a look
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Twisted_Skald
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Quote by DaisyChained
Quote by Twisted_Skald



So C is mostly a poor dupe that A used for her pleasure and I get to go through an emotional journey.



Hi Michelle

I guess it depends on your story. My cuckold story made C the protagonist and the story was written through her eyes. I wanted to try something different, and I got an RR, so I think it worked.

I don’t know how to post a link, but it was called A Thousand Miles if you want to take a look


Thank you Daisy, A very helpful suggestion.
Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

I've been listening to my kinky pencil here's my current work

My current Competition entry is here
A Cure For Stagefright

I put a little banner in here, it might change. I'm still messing about with it.
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Quote by DaisyChained
Quote by Twisted_Skald



So C is mostly a poor dupe that A used for her pleasure and I get to go through an emotional journey.



Hi Michelle

I guess it depends on your story. My cuckold story made C the protagonist and the story was written through her eyes. I wanted to try something different, and I got an RR, so I think it worked.

I don’t know how to post a link, but it was called A Thousand Miles if you want to take a look


You have to make 20 forum posts before it lets you post links, but that story was so beautiful. It brought a tear to my eye.

A Thousand Miles
Twisted_Skald
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Thank you Violet, that's one heck of a story. Who says cucks can't be romantic tales.
I've got something in my eye.
Whatever was posted is always meant in love and respect never to offend.
I'm also highly likely to have posted this from a phone so there may be typos or odd word changes, auto correct can be a pain.

I've been listening to my kinky pencil here's my current work

My current Competition entry is here
A Cure For Stagefright

I put a little banner in here, it might change. I'm still messing about with it.
DaisyChained
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You have to make 20 forum posts before it lets you post links, but that story was so beautiful. It brought a tear to my eye.

[url=https://]A Thousand Miles[/url]


Thanks so much Violet. That was very kind of you.
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NicolasBelvoir
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Quote by Twisted_Skald
Now I'm no expert on being a cuckold, I got the wrong parts for a start.


How about a FFF lesbian cuck story? That might be interesting!
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How about a FFF lesbian cuck story? That might be interesting!


FF+Kitty Cuck (Shameless self-plug - I always imagined the cat was a lesbian)

But really, you should all read Daisy’s take on it. Actually, one of the things I like is seeing other authors offer different takes on the same category. I see your story’s on the front page now, Michelle. I’ll go ahead and take a look.
SeattleHubby
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"Is it important to know how B is feeling as the scene unfolds?". In my opinion, and especially for cuckold stories, which are emotionally complex and can be so amazingly powerful for me, sharing B's feelings (thoroughly) is critical. I need to know that A clearly sees how the scene is effecting B so that she can tweek/manipulate things causing him to experience even more of those very complex and powerful cuckold feelings. With a few really powerful cuckold stories I have actually had to put the story away for a few hours (or days) because even though I was intensely aroused I was also feeling exactly what B was feeling (fear, humiliation, angst, sadness ...). if that makes sense.

BullOne
Rookie Scribe

I've only just come across this thread.

I found no stories examining the cuckold lifestyle from the bull's perspective, which as a long time bull I found frustrating.

So I did what any sensible voyager would do, and started writing about how and why I came to this role. I've been really pleasantly surprised about the positive reaction, especially from women who find the narrative quite empowering.

Usually in cuckold stories the bull seems to be a bit part, incidental, or just a dumb animal. But I assure you, we're not all like that? A deep respect for women and their pleasure (and mine) is what's driven me.

If you have the time, please take a look and let me know what you think.
BullOne
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Oh, the series starts here

https://www.lushstories.com/stories/cuckold/why-i-am-a-bull